Ok, I went through Better Thesis Statements and here is my thesis (tell me what you think):
Although the Gothic, Blackletter font Textura is now considered "illegible"; cultural, political, and religious reasons behind its development should be taken into account in assessing its value.
Your thesis looks good, i'm not very skilled when it comes to papers and thesis statements and that kind of stuff so I don't feel really adequate to say much. but i do wonder what it would do to add just a tid bit as to why it's illegible or something. Maybe rewording it to have the first line the same, but then say "when assessing it's value, cultural, political, and religious reasons of it's development should be taken into account"
ReplyDeleteI think it's great though, so i'm only putting ideas to see if they might help in any way possible. Looks good!
ok thanks kody!
ReplyDeleteI know this is a few days late, but here are my thoughts if you still want them. It sounds like a really good paper, first of all. The suggestions I have are that: (1) you might want to define "value" a little bit. Do you think we should still be using it? we shouldn't trash-talk ancient people for using it? or is it just an interesting historical artifact? (2) The second part of your thesis is passive. This is okay if you want it to be this way, but it is something to be aware of. Active voice is usually stronger. (3) the semicolon should be a comma.
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